请帮忙改这篇英文作文帮我指出其中语法或者时态之类的错误,最好能有评价1.目前盗版的现象比较严重2.造成这种现象的原因及危

这篇文章总的来说还是不错,英语功底挺好的.只是内容和用词还可以写得更深刻,有一些语法错误.Pirated products depend on their cheap operating cost and easy making more and more appeal to the lowless people.这句话可以改成：Depending on their lower operating cost and easy making method,priated products are appealing to more and more people in the market.
So some of lowless people in order to seek the money,they produced the pirated products.句中的in order to 要放在句首：in order to seek money,some of the ...
This appearance threaten(加S） the intellctual property rights serious（用副词seriously).It breaks the law and copyrights infringement.
In my opinion,we should stop to buy the pirated products from(换个介词,by或for ) ourselves.If we see somebody who buying（用一般时态,这是一个从句,buys) or selling(用sells,如果这句话不用从句,去掉who,就可以用ing)the pirated products,we must try all means to stop them and tell them the harm of （加个doing要好些）this thing.
I think attack the piracy is our duty.这句话可以换一个表达方式：i think fighting against the priracy is our duty.用attack不太恰当,而且这里的动词要用ing.