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People listen to music for different reasons and at different times.Why is music important to many people?
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It can never be doubted that music has been the best companion of human beings since it was used in oringin hunting and military.Music still takes the one of the most important role of our life.It can temperate our mood,consolidate our heart and make the fasion points.
Human can be touchd by music.People who are listening to the relaxed,fine,music tend to behavior easily and happily.By contrast,the sadder melody you listen to,the gloomier you will be.For example we can find that the good music is played in most of makets to attract and stimulate customers to purchase more.As a matter of fact,the turnover of market which plays fine music will be more than those which do not.
Music also can consolidate our hearts and volition.When we face some difficulties or setbacks,Music can strength our confidence,help us conqer the difficulties.Marseillaise,which is the anthem of France,is a famous song all over the world.In 18th century,French people got the final victory of the Great Revolution under the inspiration of Marseillaise.Another famous music is the Internationate,which was created by Eugène Pottier,composed by Pierre De Geyter.The Internationate conmemorate the revolting of the French workors and the failure of the Paris Commute.Now it is still the song of battling over the proletarians.
In the past of decades years,the muti-styles of music has been created by artists.They are Blues,Hip-Hop……all of them became the fashion focus at that present and have been welcomed by most of young people.It is the music that forge some super stars who we chreished,the king of cats(Alvis Presley),the beatles andMichel Jackson which is my favorate super star.The music which they offer us give us happy,feeling of fashion and self confidence.
“No music,no life”.which is the famous saying by some fans.,tell us that we will not enjoy lives without music.It is too important to miss any part of the wonderful music.People are expecting more and better music.
People listen to music for different reasons and at different times.Why is music important to many people?
正文：
It can never be doubted that music has been the best companion of human beings since it was used in oringin hunting and military.Music still takes the one of the most important role of our life.It can temperate our mood,consolidate our heart and make the fasion points.
Human can be touchd by music.People who are listening to the relaxed,fine,music tend to behavior easily and happily.By contrast,the sadder melody you listen to,the gloomier you will be.For example we can find that the good music is played in most of makets to attract and stimulate customers to purchase more.As a matter of fact,the turnover of market which plays fine music will be more than those which do not.
Music also can consolidate our hearts and volition.When we face some difficulties or setbacks,Music can strength our confidence,help us conqer the difficulties.Marseillaise,which is the anthem of France,is a famous song all over the world.In 18th century,French people got the final victory of the Great Revolution under the inspiration of Marseillaise.Another famous music is the Internationate,which was created by Eugène Pottier,composed by Pierre De Geyter.The Internationate conmemorate the revolting of the French workors and the failure of the Paris Commute.Now it is still the song of battling over the proletarians.
In the past of decades years,the muti-styles of music has been created by artists.They are Blues,Hip-Hop……all of them became the fashion focus at that present and have been welcomed by most of young people.It is the music that forge some super stars who we chreished,the king of cats(Alvis Presley),the beatles andMichel Jackson which is my favorate super star.The music which they offer us give us happy,feeling of fashion and self confidence.
“No music,no life”.which is the famous saying by some fans.,tell us that we will not enjoy lives without music.It is too important to miss any part of the wonderful music.People are expecting more and better music.
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