Revise the following sentences.Try to make them more effecti

问题描述：

Revise the following sentences.Try to make them more effective.(30%)英语改错求正解
1.To swim in a pool is not as much fun as swimming in a river.
2.Leonardo da Vince was known both as an inventor and painting pictures.
3.The foreman shouted at both of us,Peter and I,before we had a chance to explain.
4.In the book it tells us about a spring when no birds sang.
5.Rachel Carson was a woman who pioneered in ecological studies.
6.Ralph Nader has throughout our country become a well-known name.
7.Partly through his efforts safety devices were installed in cars such as seat belts.
8.On arriving at the river,the current was frightening.
9.At the age of 6 months,her father taught her to swim.
10.My father is a history teacher,so I take it as my major.

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To swim →Swimming
句子结构不平衡:主语为不定式To swim,与它相比较的却是动名词swimming.
因此把To swim改成 Swimming.
2.both as an inventor and painting pictures.→
both as an inventor and a painter
或:both as an inventor and for painting pictures.
句子结构不平衡:an inventor指人,而painting pictures表示行为动作,
因此两者不能构成并列关系.

3.Peter and I→Peter and me
Peter and I是宾语both of us 的同位语,应该用宾格.

4.去掉累赘多余的词,改成:
The book tells about a spring when no birds sang.

5.was a woman who为累赘多余的词,应去掉,改成：
Rachel Carson pioneered in ecological studies.

6.句子成分错位,throughout our country放错了位置.应改成:
Ralph Nader has become a well-known name throughout our country.

7.句子成分错位,such as seat belts 放错了位置.应改成:
Partly through his efforts safety devices such as seat belts were installed in cars .

8.逻辑主语混乱,可改成:
On arriving at the river,we were frightened by the current .
或:When we arrived at the river , the current was frightening.

9.介词短语的逻辑主语错误:让人误以为是"her father"在6岁的时候",因此应改成:
When she was at the age of 6 months,her father taught her to swim.

10.it→history
it指代不清楚,因此应改为history .
再问：答案准不准确肯不肯定
再答：绝对准确, 肯定正确 !

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