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The line charts gives a breakdown of the proportion of men and women according to their weight.The weight groups are divided into three categories,which were healthy weight,overweight,obese and dangerously obese.
The percentage of overweight women remained at the same level(below 50%)without remarkable change.Compared with male counterparts,whose percentage has risenslightly from approximately 42% to 46%.Both of the healthy rate was a downward trend,accounted for around 45% in 1993 and 36% in 2002,and the percentage of women comprised from 40% to about 31%.
It is noticeable that the rate of dangerously obese and obese of male and female stood at the similar trend.By contrast,the percentage of female obese was marginally lower than men's.However,the proportion of male dangerously obese was a little higher than female counterparts.
To sum up,the percentage of overweight of men was much higher than women. http://wenwen.soso.com/z/q148267354.htm图在这!详细的说下我的缺点...再打个分...
The line charts gives a breakdown of the proportion of men and women according to their weight.The weight groups are divided into three categories,which were healthy weight,overweight,obese and dangerously obese.
The percentage of overweight women remained at the same level(below 50%)without remarkable change.Compared with male counterparts,whose percentage has risenslightly from approximately 42% to 46%.Both of the healthy rate was a downward trend,accounted for around 45% in 1993 and 36% in 2002,and the percentage of women comprised from 40% to about 31%.
It is noticeable that the rate of dangerously obese and obese of male and female stood at the similar trend.By contrast,the percentage of female obese was marginally lower than men's.However,the proportion of male dangerously obese was a little higher than female counterparts.
To sum up,the percentage of overweight of men was much higher than women. http://wenwen.soso.com/z/q148267354.htm图在这!详细的说下我的缺点...再打个分...
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