(高分)评价一下这篇英语作文.指出优点与不足,

(高分)评价一下这篇英语作文.指出优点与不足,
书面表达
假设你是李华,你在报上看到北京电视台今年七月将举办外国人“学中文,唱中文歌”才艺大赛.你的美国朋友Peter正在北京一所大学学中文,你觉得他应去试一试.请按以下要点给他写信告知此事,并表示可以提供帮助.比赛时间：7 月18日
报名时间：截止到6月30日
报名地点：北京电视台
注意：
1.词数：100左右
2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯
3.参考词汇：才艺大赛-talent show
Dear Peter,
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Yours,Li Hua
Dear Peter
I'm writing to inform you of the exciting news that the Beijing TV station is to hold a Chinese song singing talent show which is specially intended for foreigners.
The competiton will be starting on July.18th,when you happen to be on the summer vocation.It won't be too late for you to sign up in Beijing TV station until june.30th.
You must have realised what i mean.You are a university student studying in China and you are majored in Chinese,the subject that doubtlessly you do well in.Besides,having attached all my best expectancy to you,I would never be unwilling to offer help when it is needed.
Write back to give me your respend as soon as possible.
Best wishes.
Yours LiHua