有人帮改演讲稿,明天就要用

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有人帮改演讲稿,明天就要用
Good morning teachers and friends!It's my honor to speak here.And I am very glad to share my topic with you.Today I'd like something about I look forward to the singer.
Why I yearn for the singer?Because I love singing.I think it is happy and relaxed.In our mood not happy,we can sing loudly,let the mood.When there is a happy thing,we sing loudly,to express our happiness.The song is beautiful,with wonderful music singing,is happy.If a beautiful song you sing,that this is how good!When your song to be recognized,that is how happy!
The singer is my dream,in order to let the dream come true,I will Study hard,in the spare time to learn more about singing and music.Only to the dream will come true.
Ok,thank for your listening that's all.
看看有没有语法错误什么的

1个回答分类：英语 2014-10-19

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嗯,很遗憾,有错误,而且还不少.
先说语法错误：
你是想当歌手,所以第一段最后一句 look forward to be a singer.要加个be,同时用不定冠词.
I‘d lile 后边少了动词,to explain why I am looking forward to be a singer.不要用something,没有档次,太口语化.
第二段第一句,同样的问题 why I yearn to be a singer?
后边完全不通,读不懂,我给你修改一下,你对比一下就明白了.
Good moring everyone!It is my honor to share my dream with you here.I am going to tell you why I am looking forward to be a singer.
Why I yearn to be a singer?Because I love singing.I feel happy and relaxed when singing lovely songs.Once we are not happy,we can sing loudly to change the mood.When there is something makes us happy,we can also sing loudly to express our happiness to others.The song with wonderful music is beautiful to be a singal of happiness.You cannot imagine how good it is to sing such a beautiful song and how happy you would be when your song is recognized!
Since to be a singer is my dream,I will study hard and learn more about singing and music in the spare time in order to make my dream to be come true.
That is my dream and I do believe I can realize it by my effort.
Thank you for your listening.
最后不要说that's all.那是不好的.

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