初中英语小句子改错I'd love to attend the Expo as a volunteer to help

I'd love to attend the World Expo as a volunteer to help foreigners know more about Shanghai.
(1)I'm dynamic and honest.I have a strong sense of responsibility.
(2)I love erhu fiddle,painting,sports,movies and reading,which can keep me energetic and fresh.
(3)I sincerely hope that you grant me the chance to study at this school.
看看这样修改如何?
high sense是中国式英语,要避免.二胡英语不必大写.原文dynamic拼写错误.which引导非限制性定语从句,前面要有逗号.hope引起的祈使句要用原形动词.