问题描述：
求修改Personal Statement
希望哪位英语较好的朋友能帮忙看一下
可能会比较多 我最终会加到200分的
之前已经修改过一次 大的问题应该不会有多少 主要看看细节有什么不妥.
To whom it may concern,
I am a Chinese undergraduate from xxx University which is a member of the 211 Project of elite research-led institutions in China,my major is International Trade.After long deliberation,I set my mind on the program of Master in Accounting and Finance in your university.
During my academic years,I took courses in International Business,International Finance,Foundation of Accounting etc.Though the specialized studies,I had a profound understanding of the field knowledge.Meanwhile,the environment of my college is open and flexible,which significantly improved my analytical ability and problem solving skills.Also,I am good at English reading and writing and I passed the CET-4,which is a national college English test.
Apart from the academic study at university,I also did a lot of internship in the spare time.From June 2008 to December 2008 I worked for XXXX as an accountant intern.I’ve known the accountancy service well during this stage,which is very useful to my future study and work.
With the opening up of China’s financial industry,interacting among China and other countries become more frequently.As a Chinese student,I want to have deeper study in this area.Although,world is suffering the worst financial crisis in the century,but my enthusiasm for this field remained unabated.It is not only a subject with bright future,but also I have passion for it.Moreover,I think a comprehensive talent with both accounting and finance academic knowledge will more competitive in their future career.
In the year of 2002,I went to Australia as an exchange student at Billabong High School.It gave me a chance to understand Australian culture.I also see it as a big plus for my quick adaption to my further academic study in Australia.
Australia is a developed country with modern and international atmosphere.Your university has the latest and advanced academic knowledge,especially in my major.According to my capability and experiences,I am sure that I can handle the affairs of both my study and living there in your university.I truly hope you can give my application after your serious consideration.I will appreciate it greatly.Eagerly await your reply.
Yours sincerely.
希望哪位英语较好的朋友能帮忙看一下
可能会比较多 我最终会加到200分的
之前已经修改过一次 大的问题应该不会有多少 主要看看细节有什么不妥.
To whom it may concern,
I am a Chinese undergraduate from xxx University which is a member of the 211 Project of elite research-led institutions in China,my major is International Trade.After long deliberation,I set my mind on the program of Master in Accounting and Finance in your university.
During my academic years,I took courses in International Business,International Finance,Foundation of Accounting etc.Though the specialized studies,I had a profound understanding of the field knowledge.Meanwhile,the environment of my college is open and flexible,which significantly improved my analytical ability and problem solving skills.Also,I am good at English reading and writing and I passed the CET-4,which is a national college English test.
Apart from the academic study at university,I also did a lot of internship in the spare time.From June 2008 to December 2008 I worked for XXXX as an accountant intern.I’ve known the accountancy service well during this stage,which is very useful to my future study and work.
With the opening up of China’s financial industry,interacting among China and other countries become more frequently.As a Chinese student,I want to have deeper study in this area.Although,world is suffering the worst financial crisis in the century,but my enthusiasm for this field remained unabated.It is not only a subject with bright future,but also I have passion for it.Moreover,I think a comprehensive talent with both accounting and finance academic knowledge will more competitive in their future career.
In the year of 2002,I went to Australia as an exchange student at Billabong High School.It gave me a chance to understand Australian culture.I also see it as a big plus for my quick adaption to my further academic study in Australia.
Australia is a developed country with modern and international atmosphere.Your university has the latest and advanced academic knowledge,especially in my major.According to my capability and experiences,I am sure that I can handle the affairs of both my study and living there in your university.I truly hope you can give my application after your serious consideration.I will appreciate it greatly.Eagerly await your reply.
Yours sincerely.
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