中译英,一段短文你知道怎么才会遇见美人鱼吗?要游到海底,那里的海更蓝,在那里蓝天变成了回忆,躺在寂静中,你决定留在那里,

Do you know how to meet a mermaid?
第一句没问题
Swim to the bottom of the sea,where has bluer water.
这里我使用定语从句,句子可以更简介些.
The sky becomes a memory there.
这句话是独立的句子,不能够跟之前的句子直接相连,所以要单独成句(T变成大写).如果想要连在之前的句子上就要用and连接.
Lying in silence,and you must stay there with a determine mind and
then the mermaids will appear.
decided的时态错了,应该用一般现在时.
They will give you warm welcome and test your love.
If you love is ture and pure enough,they will accept you .
You will be taken away forever.
后两句根据自己的理解翻译,楼主的翻译也没有问题.