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高手来修改英文文章语法错误（2）
Moreover,as a member of student union,I was elected as the Director of Sports Department in 2005.In the activities that I planned the one of worth mentioning is that I carried out the evaluation using mathematical method of Probability and Statistics taught in college on the campus basketball league we planed,and originally issued the campus basketball lottery.Finally we sold 400 pieces of lottery and got 500 yuan RMB of pure profit.And all the proceeds were donated to the charity.
In 2007 I passed the selection and joined the volunteer ranks of the Shanghai Special Olympic Game and the Women's Football World Cup.Through these experience,especially in Special Olympic Game,I raise my oral English level perceptibly and learn how to communicate with people from other cultures.In fact,I found that only if one have a respectful and friendly heart,he can get along with any people well in this world!
As for my interests and loves literature,music,tourism and sports are my favorites.In the aspect of literature I appreciate very much written by Adam Smith,and some works written by Stefan Zweig.between the lines,I could feel the delicate feelings of the authors and get great resonance from it!Under their impact,I even wrote a 30 thousand words fiction in 2007.(posted on yangjunxian.blogbus.com)
All above makes me well-prepared for upgrading my knowledge structure of finance at your institution.From the propaganda of British universities,I am really attracted by the well-arranged courses,dainty studying surrounding and handy facilities.Besides my academic pursuit,going to UK for further education will offer me a good opportunity to look around and understand the outside world.Absorbed by your practical course structure,variable teaching method,the charming buildings and the fine career futures,I wish I could have the honor to joining you soon and proving my value to you as a qualified student today,and as a pride-taking alumnus tomorrow.
Yours sincerely Yang Junxian
Moreover,as a member of student union,I was elected as the Director of Sports Department in 2005.In the activities that I planned the one of worth mentioning is that I carried out the evaluation using mathematical method of Probability and Statistics taught in college on the campus basketball league we planed,and originally issued the campus basketball lottery.Finally we sold 400 pieces of lottery and got 500 yuan RMB of pure profit.And all the proceeds were donated to the charity.
In 2007 I passed the selection and joined the volunteer ranks of the Shanghai Special Olympic Game and the Women's Football World Cup.Through these experience,especially in Special Olympic Game,I raise my oral English level perceptibly and learn how to communicate with people from other cultures.In fact,I found that only if one have a respectful and friendly heart,he can get along with any people well in this world!
As for my interests and loves literature,music,tourism and sports are my favorites.In the aspect of literature I appreciate very much written by Adam Smith,and some works written by Stefan Zweig.between the lines,I could feel the delicate feelings of the authors and get great resonance from it!Under their impact,I even wrote a 30 thousand words fiction in 2007.(posted on yangjunxian.blogbus.com)
All above makes me well-prepared for upgrading my knowledge structure of finance at your institution.From the propaganda of British universities,I am really attracted by the well-arranged courses,dainty studying surrounding and handy facilities.Besides my academic pursuit,going to UK for further education will offer me a good opportunity to look around and understand the outside world.Absorbed by your practical course structure,variable teaching method,the charming buildings and the fine career futures,I wish I could have the honor to joining you soon and proving my value to you as a qualified student today,and as a pride-taking alumnus tomorrow.
Yours sincerely Yang Junxian
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