求大神修改其中的语法与逻辑错误

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求大神修改其中的语法与逻辑错误
I am the only child of my family
I am the only child of my family.My parents always put their attention to me.They develop themselves to me.But I often feel envy when my father told me about the story of their brothers.When they were children,they always play together.I look forward to having some brothers.Although I have to share my room and parents’ love with them,I will feel really happy.I have lots of candies,but I don’t have a people to share with.Of cause I have friends and classmates,but they are different.I hope that I have a brother who I grew up with.The relationship between he and I will be inseparable.But those are dream.I am the only child of my family.
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They develop themselves to me.建议换一句,没看懂.
feel后面应该加形容词envious
When they were children,they always play together.时间上是过去时,应用played
parents’ love 换成the love of my parents 会更好点吧
but I don’t have a people to share with--But no one to share with me
I hope that I will have ;who--whom; can grow up with
those--these
个人建议,仅供参考,文章内容写得很好啊
 
 
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