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The line graph illustrates the death rate and the birth rate in a developing country between 1900 to 1970.
It is clearly that at the first decade(1900~1910) both death rate and birth rate kept 40%,after which the data shows a fluctuation.The death rate rose rapidly and finally peaked up at 60% in 1920.Then,it dropped down as a same speed when it rose and stopped till 1940.from the period 1940 to 1970,death rate maintained a slight fluctuation.
Coming to the birth rate,a slight decrease from 4o% in 1900 to 35% in 1930.From then on ,the birth rate surpassed to the death rate and reached the highest point(roughly 50%) in 1940,while death rate were showed the lowest.After a sharp raise the tendency became decline and moderation.And the rates in birth and death stood at 30% and 20% in 1970,respectively.
Overall,along with the country developed in 70 years,its death rate and birth rate changed a lot and turned to be better in the future.What’s more,the birth rate finally higher than the death rate.
谢谢各位大牛及烤鸭同路人!
The line graph illustrates the death rate and the birth rate in a developing country between 1900 to 1970.
It is clearly that at the first decade(1900~1910) both death rate and birth rate kept 40%,after which the data shows a fluctuation.The death rate rose rapidly and finally peaked up at 60% in 1920.Then,it dropped down as a same speed when it rose and stopped till 1940.from the period 1940 to 1970,death rate maintained a slight fluctuation.
Coming to the birth rate,a slight decrease from 4o% in 1900 to 35% in 1930.From then on ,the birth rate surpassed to the death rate and reached the highest point(roughly 50%) in 1940,while death rate were showed the lowest.After a sharp raise the tendency became decline and moderation.And the rates in birth and death stood at 30% and 20% in 1970,respectively.
Overall,along with the country developed in 70 years,its death rate and birth rate changed a lot and turned to be better in the future.What’s more,the birth rate finally higher than the death rate.
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