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这样的雅思作文能得几分?
说明:我的目标只是5至5.5 请问可以达到吗?
some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using computer.
作文如下
In current society,it is a well-know fact that computer plays a key role in our lives,and some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using computer.When asked about whether this idea is right,people hold divergent view.From my own perspective,I think their view is unconvincing.
Of course,it is true that people see historical objects and works by using computer,which may bring some upside.To begin with,there is more comfortable of seeing historical objects and works by computer.It is clearly that you can drinking and eating when you see them by computer.Moreover,It is easier for people.It seems that you do not travel around the world and you can see all the historical objects and works around world.
Having said this,however we still need public museums and art galleries.In the first place,you can’t know all about it just through the computer.It is fact that you can know how great the great wall is when you stand in front of it.In the second place,you can’t touch it through computer.It seems to say you can’t know what a real it likes.Last but not least,it shows the culture of that country.as a matter of fact,any country don’t want to lose their culture.That is the thing,which computer can’t replace.
On the basis of the above discussion,the computer has given us a lot of convenience.We can see any historical objects and works by it.But we still need public museums and art galleries.Overall,we should preserve historical objects and works and get it known by everyone.
麻烦回答的细致一些 哪些有错误 哪些有待提高
说明:我的目标只是5至5.5 请问可以达到吗?
some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using computer.
作文如下
In current society,it is a well-know fact that computer plays a key role in our lives,and some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using computer.When asked about whether this idea is right,people hold divergent view.From my own perspective,I think their view is unconvincing.
Of course,it is true that people see historical objects and works by using computer,which may bring some upside.To begin with,there is more comfortable of seeing historical objects and works by computer.It is clearly that you can drinking and eating when you see them by computer.Moreover,It is easier for people.It seems that you do not travel around the world and you can see all the historical objects and works around world.
Having said this,however we still need public museums and art galleries.In the first place,you can’t know all about it just through the computer.It is fact that you can know how great the great wall is when you stand in front of it.In the second place,you can’t touch it through computer.It seems to say you can’t know what a real it likes.Last but not least,it shows the culture of that country.as a matter of fact,any country don’t want to lose their culture.That is the thing,which computer can’t replace.
On the basis of the above discussion,the computer has given us a lot of convenience.We can see any historical objects and works by it.But we still need public museums and art galleries.Overall,we should preserve historical objects and works and get it known by everyone.
麻烦回答的细致一些 哪些有错误 哪些有待提高
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