Last summer holiday的文章怎么写啊?

这篇小文章,参考了:
Last summer holiday
In the first seven days of the holiday,I went to Yunnan with a girl.She is a daughter of my mum's good friend,and we knew each other since we were little girls.
My trip to Yunnan is really hard though.
We spent maybe 1/3 on bus,1/3 in the scenic spots,1/3 in the shops!We felt very disappointed at this.Especially for her,she regarded Lijiang as the heaven in her heart.Obviously the Travel Agent destroyed her dream