大家看一下我写的英语作文（初一写的）

Do you know me,my friends?（建议不要,老外不这么用.）My name's Steven Yuan.I am 12 years old.
（My name's Steven Yuan,12.比较地道）I like eating chicken,apples and bananas,but I don't like carrots at all.（but not carrots at all,两分句并列结构且主谓相同,可省.）As for sports,I like playing baseball,but I don't like playing soccer or tennis.（和前一句句型完全一样,建议修改As for sports,I prefer baseball rather than soccer or tennis.）My favorite colour is blue,but I hate black.（不错.）This is me（英语标点很严格的,不能用感叹号）.
虽然改了很多,但总的来说你写的很好,我初一时比你差远了.