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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
It is undeniable that young people are more adaptable to new things and tend to have fun,but it is untrue to say that older people don’t enjoy their life.From my perspective,I cling to an unshakeable that older people savor life as much as young people do.
Young people are more likely to have thrilling activity than old people.For example,my friends,a bunch of 20-year-old college students,like going to Karaoke for weekends and visiting Disneyland for short vacation,while some of them prefer to go clubbing at night and get drunk.We say these people are enjoying their youth and lives.However,is that “enjoy life” all about?Is Karaoke and clubbing the only way to entertain ourselves?The answer is absolutely not.Old people are also having fun if we find another way to define “enjoy life”.
First of all,old people usually like nature than young people do in my observations.For example,hiking,picnic and fishing are the entertainments that many old people would like to do in their leisure.Going to countryside and breathing some fresh air can be exciting and refreshing.Besides,they can never do that in a crowded and suffocating city.I think going to the nature is one way to relax and enjoy lives for old people.
Further lending credence to my position is that chatting with different kinds of people is also one way for old people to have fun.Old people have extensive and wide knowledge through their life experiences; therefore,they have endless topics to talk about.Take my grandmother’s example:she is a 80-year-old woman who used to be an editor.She is so erudite that everybody asks her questions,such as what the allusions in the books mean.Every time I talk with her,I benefit a lot and she seems to enjoy talking with everybody who is eager to ask her questions.
All in all,I believe that both young people and old people can have an enjoyable life.Having fun is not a supreme right for young people,but it is accessible for any people at any age.
Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a long time.Which do you think is better?
With the developing of new careers and explosive information,young people have more eclectic and wider choices about designing their future life on contemporary society than in several decades ago.However,when it comes to choice between independence from parents and living with their families,young adults get into dilemma.As far as I am concerned,I cling to an unshakeable belief that without parents’ protection young adults can do better.
两篇都在8.27晚上12点之前帮我看的人再追加分数
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
It is undeniable that young people are more adaptable to new things and tend to have fun,but it is untrue to say that older people don’t enjoy their life.From my perspective,I cling to an unshakeable that older people savor life as much as young people do.
Young people are more likely to have thrilling activity than old people.For example,my friends,a bunch of 20-year-old college students,like going to Karaoke for weekends and visiting Disneyland for short vacation,while some of them prefer to go clubbing at night and get drunk.We say these people are enjoying their youth and lives.However,is that “enjoy life” all about?Is Karaoke and clubbing the only way to entertain ourselves?The answer is absolutely not.Old people are also having fun if we find another way to define “enjoy life”.
First of all,old people usually like nature than young people do in my observations.For example,hiking,picnic and fishing are the entertainments that many old people would like to do in their leisure.Going to countryside and breathing some fresh air can be exciting and refreshing.Besides,they can never do that in a crowded and suffocating city.I think going to the nature is one way to relax and enjoy lives for old people.
Further lending credence to my position is that chatting with different kinds of people is also one way for old people to have fun.Old people have extensive and wide knowledge through their life experiences; therefore,they have endless topics to talk about.Take my grandmother’s example:she is a 80-year-old woman who used to be an editor.She is so erudite that everybody asks her questions,such as what the allusions in the books mean.Every time I talk with her,I benefit a lot and she seems to enjoy talking with everybody who is eager to ask her questions.
All in all,I believe that both young people and old people can have an enjoyable life.Having fun is not a supreme right for young people,but it is accessible for any people at any age.
Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a long time.Which do you think is better?
With the developing of new careers and explosive information,young people have more eclectic and wider choices about designing their future life on contemporary society than in several decades ago.However,when it comes to choice between independence from parents and living with their families,young adults get into dilemma.As far as I am concerned,I cling to an unshakeable belief that without parents’ protection young adults can do better.
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