问题描述：
一小段英语描述,口语,帮改下错误把
英语作业：做一个广告,自己设计然后在同学们面前介绍
下面的就是画的图
要描述的英文：
the product that i choice is a Swiss soda
first,i show you this drink.this is my drawing,we can see a bleu bottle ,this is a Swiss soda. this bottle is a little different than normal bottle.because its botteneck is long,the bottle is small for easly to bring(我觉得这句怪怪的), the bottle cap is black.
on the paper label,we can read its brand name:ENERGY,because when you drink this soda,u will fell power and get energy,we can also read a personified(拟人的) catchphrase："Drink me!"
second.i will explain my choice of drawing. i draw 2 little girls,in fact they are same person ,we can see a different on the face :before ,she seems sleeply and her eyes are closed , but after she drink ,she is spirited.
the slogan is above the girls:"Energy,gives you more energy".this slogan have double meaning ,the frist words "energy"is brand name,and second words"energy"is effect of drink.
i choiced this drawing,because it seems funny and colorful,i used the manga style for characters to pay attention(我想说的是使用了漫画的风格,为了让它能更引人注意之类的)
帮我改下错把,语法问题,还有有些词重复了点,希望能改的比较流畅点
下面是老师希望我们写进去的东西,我觉得我写的不够多不是很仔细,所以希望在扩展一点,希望能帮我想一下别的东西,是和下面这些有关的
how it works?：
-most strinking element?
-lay out
-impact
-target
-feeling appeale to
conclusion：should the company use it?efficient?well-done?
不胜感激!
英语作业：做一个广告,自己设计然后在同学们面前介绍
下面的就是画的图
要描述的英文：
the product that i choice is a Swiss soda
first,i show you this drink.this is my drawing,we can see a bleu bottle ,this is a Swiss soda. this bottle is a little different than normal bottle.because its botteneck is long,the bottle is small for easly to bring(我觉得这句怪怪的), the bottle cap is black.
on the paper label,we can read its brand name:ENERGY,because when you drink this soda,u will fell power and get energy,we can also read a personified(拟人的) catchphrase："Drink me!"
second.i will explain my choice of drawing. i draw 2 little girls,in fact they are same person ,we can see a different on the face :before ,she seems sleeply and her eyes are closed , but after she drink ,she is spirited.
the slogan is above the girls:"Energy,gives you more energy".this slogan have double meaning ,the frist words "energy"is brand name,and second words"energy"is effect of drink.
i choiced this drawing,because it seems funny and colorful,i used the manga style for characters to pay attention(我想说的是使用了漫画的风格,为了让它能更引人注意之类的)
帮我改下错把,语法问题,还有有些词重复了点,希望能改的比较流畅点
下面是老师希望我们写进去的东西,我觉得我写的不够多不是很仔细,所以希望在扩展一点,希望能帮我想一下别的东西,是和下面这些有关的
how it works?：
-most strinking element?
-lay out
-impact
-target
-feeling appeale to
conclusion：should the company use it?efficient?well-done?
不胜感激!
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