老师让写一篇英语的自我介绍,至少80词,我写了一篇,有很多错误(比如用词不当等等),求改,悬赏自提.

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老师让写一篇英语的自我介绍,至少80词,我写了一篇,有很多错误(比如用词不当等等),求改,悬赏自提.
我刚六年级毕业,这篇是交给中学老师的,可以的话麻烦再用自己的话翻译一下,看是否符合我的本意,原文如下:
Hello everyone. My name is ××××× ×××. Nice to meet you. I am a friendly boy. I like to make something interesting. I like computer very much. I can use the computer to draw some beautiful pictures. And I can do something else with computer. I like science, too. I love everything but I dislike sports. I always stay at home every day in every summer holidays. I usually stay at home to study, use computer to draw pictures, play games and do something else. Now, new term is beginning. The life of middle school is beginning, too. I should do everything better than before. I’ll do more exercise and study hardly. I think I can do that. Can you be my friend? Let’s study together!
最好能在今天改出来,急用
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Hello everyone. My name is ××××× ×××. Nice to meet you. I am a friendly boy. I like to make something interesting. I like computer very much. I can use the computer to draw some beautiful pictures. And I can do something else with computer. I like science, too. I love everything but I dislike sports. I always stay at home during every summer holiday. I usually stay at home to study, use computer to draw pictures, play games and do something else. Now, the new term is coming. The life of middle school is beginning, too. I should do everything better than before. I’ll do more exercise and study more hard. I think I can do that. Can you be my friend? Let’s study together!
你的基本功不错,但是也有几处语法错误 hardly不能表示努力地,hard表示努力时他的副词还是hard,还有既然是every后面的holiday就不用复数了,总体来说你写的不错,继续加油!
 
 
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