2013年考研英语小作文.帮我看看大致能得多少分?

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2013年考研英语小作文.帮我看看大致能得多少分?
　Directions:
　　Suppose your class is to hold a charity sale for kids in need of help.
Write your classmates an email to
　　1) inform them about the details and
　　2) encourage them to participate.
　　You should write about 100 words neatly on the ANSWER SHEET.
　　Do not sign your own name at the end of the e-mail.Use “Li Ming” instead.
　　Do not write the address.
Hi Classmates,
Iam your dear monitor.I am writing this email to inform everybody do not forgetto join our charity sale.
The charity sale will be hold for the kids whose family cannot affordtheir incredible large tuition.In the sale,you can offer some stuff that youown but never used for sale.In one hand you can extend you dormitory’s area;in the other hand you can share your kindness with other folks.It seems to me isa spectacular ideal I made it.The Sale will be set up at 3 to 6pm Wednesday inacademic report hall.
I do appreciate if you can forward this emailto your friends,and I am looking forward to your guys arrived sincerely.
Yours awesomely
Li Ming

1个回答分类：英语 2014-10-08

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满分20分的话,能得10-13分.
首先,阅卷老师先看到的是开头.英文信件的标准开头是：Dear ., 一般不用hi
其次,正文的第一句不用介绍自己是谁,直接切入主题.因为对方收到你的信,就知道你是谁,你的职务,所以不用在开头赘述.
中间段写的不错,中间段最要注意的是单词拼写.
另外,最后一段也是老师比较喜欢看的.第一个forward .可以改为inform / notify this message to your friends. 还有,your guys arrived sincerely 应该改为you guys‘ coming. look forword to 后面应该加名词形式.
最后,结尾,英语中最常用的是：Yours, 或者是Yours sincerely, 或者是 Yours faithfully. 你用的那个awesomely一般不用到,如果碰上有些老师不习惯用那个,那你的作文分肯定就低了.

写的不错,祝你考研成功!加油!

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