第一次写SAT作文..各位前辈来看看

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第一次写SAT作文..各位前辈来看看
Topic Is the way something seems to be not always the same as it actually is
Is the way sometimes seems to be not always the same as it actually is As far as I concerned ,no doubt ,the answer is yes .In such a society which appearance is becoming more and more essential while people are becoming more and more blundering ,we won't dissect everything beneath the surface ,so our first impression can always be wrong .
In political events ,especially nowadays ,because of the inventions of camera and TV,sometimes we will judge politicians only by their appearance then conclude their characters.The most famous example of this is Yulia Tymoshenko ,the primer of Ukraine,who looks so gorgeous and weak,everyone will have such first impression when they first see her.However,it's not true ,she isn't weak ,she is more persistent than most of people ,she is the primer of the country,she launched the famous orange revolution in Ukraine,no one can disdain her on the world stage .
When we buy some books ,a multitude of books with different delicate covers and images are on the book shelves .A conclusion in our unconscious will come to our mind ,more exquisite a book is more useful the content is .To the contrary,actually ,judging a book only by its cover will mislead us.Publishers spend more and more time on the appearance of their books rather than the content of books.Sometimes ,a book with austere cover ,simple vignettes is really a masterpiece which will be conducive for us .Yet a seemingly exquisite book can be philistine or just the same content like others' with fresh titles and faces.
On balance ,we can learn appearance of something in just a second ,but the essence beneath under the surface needs us more time to excavate ,never judge by appearance.
1个回答 分类:英语 2014-10-15

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嗯,
引题需要改写.用词虽然塞了很多sat级的词汇,但是有不准确,
比如gorgeous是正态度,weak为负态度,中间and至少应该改为but
很多逗号错误,如
However,it's not true ,she isn't weak ,she is more persistent than most of people ,she is the primer of the country,she launched the famous orange revolution in Ukraine,no one can disdain her on the world stage
这中间多少个句子都是逗号连起来的?
judge后面接上什么?
有个熟语叫don't judge a book by its cover ,一定要接object
另外,老外很讨厌judge这个词,可以改appeciate 之类
还有一些错误不一一究了
总之有以下几点:
1.注意多样化表达,不要老是more and more 之类的
可以改为increasingly 之类的
2.用词准确,sat级的词汇一定要非常熟悉用法才用,不然会让人笑掉大牙
3.注意句子的完整,就如aforesaid一样
4.可以把转折词等放在verb后,更地道
5.例子有点...季莫申科是好,但是橙色革命是尤先科发起的吧,她算边上的人,所以举例要准,尤其是美国人熟悉的,不然考官哭笑不得的
ps:这个准确性还算过关,但是发掘和逻辑 不觉得有点浅显么.
分数不好打,字数你自己算下350+最好
sat改分是老外第一印象
 
 
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