修改高中英语作文了Can man live a better life without cars We,together

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修改高中英语作文了
Can man live a better life without cars We,together with a large majority of people will answer ‘yes’ .Although the invention of cars stands for the rapid development of technologhy,it brings many prblems to the morden world.
In the past 30 years ,more and more people has been killed by car accidents.Countless families have experienced unbearable sorrow and sadness as their beloved family members end their lives all of a sudden in road accidents .
The pollution is another severe problem .Now,we are appealing for a purer and (更绿色的) environment urgently.Nevertheless,the cars give off dangerous smog day and night ,which really does enormous harm to our health .
So ,let’s stop driving and we’re sure we would live a happier and healthier life without cars .
有些词不知怎么翻才好,因此括号里标注了中文.自知有许多错误!恳请哥哥,姐姐们指出.也希望能从文章结构,文采等方面提出意见和建议,
忘记把题目发上来了:你将与同学一起参加一个辩论,你们的观点是:如果汽车没有被发明,我们的世界会更美好。
1个回答 分类:英语 2014-11-18

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首先我觉得你这篇文章的主要思想“Let’s stop driving and we’re sure we would live a happier and healthier life without cars”有点...片面,但还得看作文要求了,如果是应试作文,那就这么写没问题,但如果是演讲之类的,你这么说感觉太肤浅.不管这么多了,就是提一下,你要是觉得有必要可以把最后一段再补充完整点,说点开车的好处,然后来个转折,提倡“少开车”,而不是“不开车”,这样更客观些.
你原文里的语法错误:
① Can man live a better life without cars
改正:Can men live a better life without cars?
②it brings many prblems to the morden world.
拼写错误“problems”;“modern”
③more and more people has been killed by car accidents
“people”是集合名词,后面跟“have”;介词“by”不妥,人们不是被“交通事故”杀死的,而是在交通事故中死的,建议改为“in”,不过这个问题不大.
④we are appealing for a purer and (更绿色的) environment urgently
想表达“更绿色的”,直接用“greener”就OK.
 
 
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