英语作文,请问各位同学老师我这篇英语作文有没有错,哪里错了,请以一一指点,我会改进的

Laughing Cat Diary is very fun book is后面加 a
If you not looks laughing cat diary? 改为If you don't watch laughing cat diary,
You should looks laughing cat diary 改为 should look
If you is children? 改为 If you are children
You should very like 改为 You should very like it
Laughing Cat Diary relly is young and old's like book.
改为 Laughing Cat Diary is relly young but old to like a book