下面的英语作文有没有错误.

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下面的英语作文有没有错误.
Yang Yang was born in He Nan Province in 1978 October .Reading in the eleventh middle school of Zhengzhou City. The army in august 1997,and later entered the Aviation University of Air Force in Changchun.In may 2010,was selected as an astronaut.Yang Yang was sent into space on June 16th by China’s Shenzhou 九 spacecraft.
All of the Chinese are proud of our first spacewoman---Yang Yang .
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作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;可以适当增加副词的使用;请注意分段.
标点与其前面的单词之间不应该有空格
中间的几个Yang Yang最好省略为Yang
神舟九号那里为什么会出现中文
再问: 我不知道应该怎么写,你会吗?
再答: Yang Yang was born in He Nan Province in October,1978 .Reading in the eleventh middle school of Zhengzhou City.She joined the army in August 1997, and later entered the Aviation University of Air Force in Changchun. In may 2010, Yang was selected as an astronaut。Yang Yang was sent into space on June 16th by China’s Shenzhou 9 Spacecraft。 All of the Chinese are proud of our first spacewoman---Yang Yang
 
 
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