求帮忙修改英语作文,希望可以修改错误和润色,

With the development of the times （随着时代的发展应该是With the development of time,）,chatting online has become an indispensable part of our daily life,especially with （这里介词应用for）college students.As one of my most meaningful experiences,chatting online has brought a lot of benefits to my life.For one thing,it provides us a convenient and efficient method to contact our friends,let us even thousands of miles away can also keep in touch（改为and we can easily keep in touch no matter how great the distance between us）.Unlike the telephone,we have to have a mobile phone each other can we have a talk（改为we can only start a conversation by holding a moblephone in hand） ,and the worst thing is that we can only talk with one person each time.Chatting online can offer me much opportunity(more oppotunities ) to talk with several friends at the same time.For another reason,chatting online can help us make friends from the entire world as many as we can.Also,(改成in the meantime) it can save our time and money and practice our comminuting skill.（改成time and money is necessarily saved and we can practice our comminuting skill in the process.）
Though (通过吧?through)chatting online,I have more chances to make new friends who can help me and （+we can ）exchange our ideas and learn more from each other.And the most critical result of chatting online is that we can share our mood with our friends at any time,any place without the worry about the embarrassment which may happen in face to face talk.(in a face-to-face talk)
Now I tend to chat online in English,which can promote our(改成my,不然和前面的I不搭) spoken English.In short,there is not anything in my life that is more beneficial than chatting online if we（I） can arrange the reasonable time on the network.
楼主写的很好,我只是稍加润色