帮我看下这篇英语文章语法有没有问题

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帮我看下这篇英语文章语法有没有问题
He is a myth.Oliver and his father together in the backyard to play.Only then courtyard of a break basket ball,he is the father of their own doing.His ideal is to become like their father basketball player.So he diligently every day to practice,under the guidance of his father.His father is very harsh,often scolding him.But he did not complain,but more of hard practice.University,his basketball talents gradually revealed.He is the leader of the school basketball,coaches usually let him go for the ball most critical,and he was not too disappointed coach.Under his leadership,his team scored many victories.Finally,by virtue of a superior basketball skills,he entered the NBA.He would like to be able to create their own world,but he is wrong.Here are bad everywhere.Gambling,fights,sex.He retreat.But he heard the voices of a father,the father said the children,the world is dark,you need to use your strength to overcome him.you are my children,I believe you can do.So he bravely face all,and gradually made the team confidence,and eventually became the main team.In his brilliant,his father has died.His only sadness I decided to withdraw from the NBA because basketball let him think of his father,he went to participate in baseball.After a long time,he thought of his father,I think of my father's teachings.He feels wrong,the father wanted a courageous child.He then from the new NBA,intentions and actions,the technology used to comfort his father's soul.That is,he became wearing number 23 jersey God.He is Michael Jordan!
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he was a myth.Oliver and his father played together in the backyard.only when he played basketball in the courtyard,he was himself of his own doing.he dreamed of being such basketball player as his father,thus he practiced diligently everyday under his father'a guidance .his father was very strict with him,and scolded him much.but he had no complaints about it ,just practiced more.after he entered the university,his talent on basketball revealed gradually,he became the leader of their school's basketball team,coaches usually asked him to attend critical balls and his performance didn't disappointed them.under his leadership,his team reaped many grades and victories.finally,he entered the NBA bc of his superior basketball skills.he'd like to create their own world,but something was wrong.many bad phenomenon were everywhere,such as gambling,fights ,se etc,which made him retreat.then his father's voice advanced toward his ears.father told him:"the world is dark,you need use your strength to overcome it,you are my child,i believe u can deal with them."after this,he resumed courage to face all,then team members were encouraged to be confident ,eventually the team became main one.over his excellent career,his father died.he was so sad that he decided to withdraw from the NBA ,as basketball always reminded him of his father.he participated in baseball.since it was a long time,he thought of his father,his teachings.he felt he did wrong thing and found is father wanted to see a brave child.so he returned to NBA,he believed his intentions ,actions and technology could comfort his father's soul.accopanying with his well-known identity,he became the man who always wear number 23 jersey .God.he is Michael Jordan!

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