英语六级作文修改是新东方的全真六级模拟卷.大概的说下我的英语写作水平吧；四级74分,六级70分.都是套用模板做的.现在我

英语六级作文修改
是新东方的全真六级模拟卷.
大概的说下我的英语写作水平吧；四级74分,六级70分.都是套用模板做的.
现在我不用模板看看写的怎么样.高手实话跟我说,也帮我改改.谢谢!
away from net-bar campaign
The major media exposure that one thousand students signed their
name and promised that away from net-bar in a xuzhou middle school.
there is a strange phenomenon that more and more junior or senior
students are addicted to go to the net bar for playing net games
rather than reading and studying from classes.
Maybe there are three main causes .First ,the net-bar does harm
to our students who are shortage of controlling themself .many
students spent their money that is used to buy food in playing games
in net bar ,even some students steal money from their parents' purse
Second ,to hold the campaign does tells us that we need a more and
more safe net bar ,we need use the net bar correctly .Last but not
least ,we must play more attention to our study .
As far as I'm concerned , the net bar has good sides and bad
sides .As the saying "Every coin has two sides " .we can choose the
good sides for ourselves. As for some students who are less self-
controlling ability ,they must refrain . As for others ,they can
benefit from the net bar .If they can use the nat bar correctly ,
they can get more happiness and relax .