求改SAT作文刚才发了一个帖子竟然忘记发文章了在这里发吧For long our minds have been ins

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刚才发了一个帖子竟然忘记发文章了在这里发吧
For long our minds have been instilled with fixed ideas which seem so inviolable that to question them is to make ourselves ridiculous.These firmly held ideas do serve a regulative role in our society,however,in spite of their pervasiveness and deep root planted in people's minds,they should not necessarily be always reasonable.
Centuries ago,theology and its theories were so ingrained that no one would deny that human beings were nothing more than a trick of God and that everyone must subordinate to God,whose existence has yet been proven.One of the examples that could prove theology's ideas unreasonable was theologists's insitence on geocentric theory.In some of the works of Galileo,he expressed obvious supposition about heliocentric theory,and therefore the Church began to take note of him and then in all possible ways tortured him to death.Had the geocentric theory been of slight logic,though we now know it has not ,the Church would not hesitate to contend with Galileo and to prove their ideas' correctness instead of tormenting a hero so savagely.Ingrained as one idea is,there is no proof that it has to be infallible,and actually it’s its firmness that deceives us,thus leading us to a preposterous misbelief that firmly held viewpoints must be reasonable.
Taking a deep-rooted belief in what we are told,we usually forgo to question the seemingly faultless opinions.For example,as an amateur in computer science,I always thought that the computer processor,as many say,will execute every instruction specified.But later when I developed some softwares within which I found various inexplicable bugs.It turned out to be unknown optimization done on my software that created the bugs.As a saying goes,“Believing everything the book says is as mindless as believing nothing”.It is not that we should abandon all the fixed opinions but that we should aware that they have the same possibility to be wrong,and only to examine them in real lives will we know what the truth is.
One phenomenon I noticed is when we know an opinion for long existed and believed by most,we tend to regard it as something well-established and impeccable.But there is no logic that old things must be right,otherwise human progress would not have been so flourishing after Renaissance.
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本文几个语法错还是比较明显的,暂且不表;
亮点我归纳为①大量长单句的使用,显示作者较为缜密的逻辑;
②强调、倒装、虚拟语气、限制性定语从句运用的比较出色.
 
 
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