英语翻译Founded in 2006,Shenzhen Bohua Precise Plastic Appliance

翻译这篇的人语法还OK,用词有很多不恰当,句式有些很有问题.
我仔细帮你看看,你短消息我或给我留个email. 贴在这里不能用不同颜色修改.
Founded in 2006, Shenzhen Bohua Plastic Precise Appliance Co., Ltd is one of most reputable manufacturer specialized in plastic moulding and electrical appliance products. We provide a comprehensive service in the whole manufacture process including researching, developing, producing and selling.
Precise Appliance 放在一起,把Plastic放前面
知名的用reputable
electrical 拼写错误
把specialized in plastic moulding and electrical appliance products放一起好些,英语都是先说主干再说细节
不要用&, 太不正式
Our company was initially engaged in the production of plastic toys, moulding & processing & promotion products for the national & abroad markets, such as plastic moulding, cartoon toys, mobile phone shells, etc. Now, we have exp&ed our products range to mobile phone chargers & power adapters. For example, chargers are emergency mobile chargers, USB chargers, travel chargers, home chargers, car chargers; adapters are notebook power adapters, multi-function power adapters; & digital products are MP3/4, digital cameras.
这句写得既罗嗦, 语序又很不正确.你前面说做模具,后面自己又把自己否定了,说我们做电话充电器.如果你现在不做模具了,那又有什么必要提呢?如果你现在还做模具,那你就告诉他你们什么都做不就可以了?我没明白你的逻辑,为什么要强调时间的先后.
We were initially engaged in the plastic moulding processing for a large range of products such as promotion products, cartoon toys, mobile phone shells, etc. for the domestic and overseas markets.
Recently (或In Jan 2007,如果你想表达你们已经做了很久的话) , we have expanded our production range onto phone chargers & power adapters. Currently our wide ranges of charger and adapter products are applied in mobile, PC, travel, vehicle, living products etc.
红色这句你如果要罗列产品也可以,不过我觉得不应该在公司介绍中讲的那么详细,你也可以说：
Currently our charger and adapter products include:
mobile chargers,
USB chargers,
travel chargers,
home chargers,
car chargers;
notebook power adapters,
multi-function power adapters;
MP3/4,
digital cameras.
但我觉得这样结构很奇怪
As for our factory: we have one high-speed CNC center, three electric discharge machines, eight cnc milling machines, one automatic paint coating production line(eight tanks), two wave solders, thirty-one horizontal injection machines (80t~200t). The plants are nearly 7000 square meters. We have 600 employees 10% of which are management, 4% of which are technology staff 3% & 2% of which are QC & engineers.
改：
We possess the most advanced equipments and production lines: one high-speed CNC center, three electric discharge machines, eight CNC milling machines, one automatic paint coating production line(eight tanks), two wave solders, thirty-one horizontal injection machines (80t~200t). Our manufacturing factories take up an area of 7000 square meters and we have more than 600 experienced employees of which 10% are management, 4% are technology, 3% QC and 2% engineers.
In operation, we insist the principal of “pursuing preciseness, high quality and market demand”. We pay special attention to technology, intelligence input and innovation. Focusing on our customers, we provide satisfying products through strict and scientific management. Strict and scientific management ensure that the products are complied with the rules of the authorization and the audit of ISO9001:2001 Quality System.
我想你是要说“操作上.”,不要用in operation.不对.
此外,原则是principle, 不是principal （校长,本金）
Our enterprises principle is “Pursuing preciseness and high quality, satisfying customers and market demand.” We always pay high attention to the development and innovation of technologies and intelligence, provide a high level of the customer service, and apply strict and scientific management methods on our production process. Our products are strictly complied with ISO9001:2001 Quality System and other authorization standards.
We always adhere to the guiding principle of customer satisfaction to meet ever-changing market dem&s. Furthermore, we have always placed emphasis on keeping up the times & improving our production technology as well as quality assurance. Armed with more than five years' professional experience in production, equipped with reliable materials & the up-to-date technology, our skilled staff can surely provide you with precise products according to your design.
这一段与上面的有所重复,这样写比较简洁：
We always treat any customer as the most appreciated and valuable, and we are confident that with our reliable materials, quality assurance and the up-to-date technology, we can absolutely provide you with precise products upon your design and other special requirements.
If you are interested in any of our products, or are searching for a supplier to fulfill your OEM order, please feel free to contact us to discuss your requirements. We sincerely welcome customers both at home & abroad to cooperate with us to develop business cooperation.
这段还可以,稍微修改了一下.
If you are interested in any of our products, or are seeking for a reliable and stable supplier to fulfill your OEM order, please feel free to contact us to discuss your requirements. We sincerely welcome both domestic and overseas customers to build and develop business cooperation.