请帮我批改一下英语作文:我的幸福生活

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请帮我批改一下英语作文:我的幸福生活
MyHappiness in Life
Whatis happiness?Happiness is when you get sick when someone gives you a cup ofwater and drugs.
Onetime,I was sick in bed.He came home from work and saw me like this,andasked:"Are you sick?" I said:"cold have a fever." Helistened to me,he poured a glass of water,took a drugs,let me medication,atthat time,I am very happy!
Inretrospect,happiness is so simple when you are sick when someone gives you acup of water and drugs,this is my happiness in life.
1个回答 分类:英语 2014-11-24

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你这作文更像是我的朋友,不是我的幸福生活.
标点用的不好;
叙事太过平淡
没有大的语法错误,时态用的不错.
 
 
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