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Today I am going to introduce a famous person, his name is Steve Jobs .This name may sound strange for most of you. Well, it doesn't matter, listen to me carefully ,and you will know who he is.
He was born in San Francisco and he liked programming so much when he was young. However,after he had finished high school ,he can't afford college anymore, so he left school.
But this things didn't let him down .He and his friend created a new company together, this company named Apple.
By the hard working of them ,with the talent of Steve Jobs,this company step by step ,got over lots of obstacles. And now Apple, has grows into a super international company.
Further more, 5 years ago , a kind of mobile phone named iPhone4 was invented by Steve Jobs.With this mobile phone ,we can watch TV ,listen to music,surf the net wherever we like.People won't feel boring on the way to somewhere.Isn't that amazing?
Well,now do you know who he is?
Steve Jobs,
The designer of the iPhone4.
The CEO of the apple company.
The man who makes our lives more convenient.
The man who has changed the history of technology again.

Thanks for everything he had contributed to the society and also to world!
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