英语语法问题改错However,the girls are unlikely to give up the privil

However, the girls are unlikely to give up the privilege of having a holiday.
It popped into my mind suddenly 【去掉that】 the day before yesterday when my monitor had each girl 【written-write】 a dream down.
All the trees were charismatically dressed, which 【was-were】 made of a quite plenty of elegant greeting cards, with all the cards 【said-saying】: may all girls become more beautiful and vigorous, happy Girls'Day!
It will play all styles of music, which represents the best wishes that boys 【make】for girls.
再问： 最后一句呢
再答： 已经给你追答了
再问： 第二句不对啊 ，还有第一句 第四句
再答： However, the girls are unlikely to give up the privilege of having 【去掉a】 holiday. It popped into my mind suddenly that the day before yesterday 【去掉when】 my monitor had each girl 【written-write】 a dream down. It will play all styles of music, which represents the best wishes 【that-those】 boys for girls.
再问： 我错了 是第三句不对
再答： All the trees were charismatically dressed, which 【was-were】 made of 【去掉a】 quite plenty of elegant greeting cards, with all the cards 【said-saying】: may all girls become more beautiful and vigorous, happy Girls'Day!