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高中英语作文评分及修改
这是即将要高三的一次模拟考,作文自己写好(无修改,一气呵成）但是没人评分,望各位老师评一下分并且写下您的观点和修改建议.
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It was Grandpa`s birthday party .Children ignored their grandpa ,playing their mobile phone all the time,grandpa signed and hearing their laughter,walked to his room lonely.It is we children who are often doing our business at parents` or grandparents`s parties.There is no denying that we ignore chat with our grandparents.What they need is a warm talk ,so how should we do at that party?here are some tips.
Firstly,never play your mobile phone during a party,if possible ,shut it off .Next ,trying to talk with our grandpa is of great significance.Nevertheless,you`d better not talk them with some short words ,which will hurt their minds ,too.Futhermore ,we ought to drink with our grandparents ,it is a symbol of love .Lastly ,smiling to our grandparents is good .
Such being this case , we will never make our grandparents lonely
这是即将要高三的一次模拟考,作文自己写好(无修改,一气呵成）但是没人评分,望各位老师评一下分并且写下您的观点和修改建议.
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It was Grandpa`s birthday party .Children ignored their grandpa ,playing their mobile phone all the time,grandpa signed and hearing their laughter,walked to his room lonely.It is we children who are often doing our business at parents` or grandparents`s parties.There is no denying that we ignore chat with our grandparents.What they need is a warm talk ,so how should we do at that party?here are some tips.
Firstly,never play your mobile phone during a party,if possible ,shut it off .Next ,trying to talk with our grandpa is of great significance.Nevertheless,you`d better not talk them with some short words ,which will hurt their minds ,too.Futhermore ,we ought to drink with our grandparents ,it is a symbol of love .Lastly ,smiling to our grandparents is good .
Such being this case , we will never make our grandparents lonely
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