帮忙修改下,主要是语法的错误,最好能解释下错因!谢谢

An American who years over half hundred, in order to completed wife's wish, in the last years he walked to cross the Chinese land, each to a city, will taken out 500 yuan enter the native Red Cross contribute money boxes……
首先说,这个长句中,一开始你用的是who 引导的定语从句,但是从句部分有些问题.An American who is over half of hundred years,应该是这样的!
下面半句,to 后面应该接动词原形即：in order to complete wife's wish
然后是"walked to cross"这个句子也稍有问题,我没在英语中常用"walk across"然后是will 后面也应该用动词原形构成一般将来时,然后will 前缺了个主语he．in the past years 也算是固定词组,“在过去的几年里”,句子大概是这样的：in the past years he walked across the Chinese land, each city,he will take out 500 yuan for the native Red Cross to contribute money boxes……
" My wife can see everything that I do in the sky" he said," I am 51 years old,47 years old of the wife who die, we are all from the Connecticut state of taught in a high school.In 1996,I steped on the Chinese land with Ornan for the first time,she is very quick was drawn on with simple people and beautiful scenery.
这句中that 应该换成what in the sky 应该是in the heaven .in the sky 是在空中的意思
47 years old of the wife who die应该用现在完成时即who had died
we are all from the Connecticut state of taught in a high school.这句all 应该改成both ,两个人都用both,三个人才是all
she is very quick was drawn on with simple people and beautiful scenery这句中出现了两个谓语显然是错误的而且你用simple这个词是为了形容人怎么样的?简单朴实?用这个词好像有点不合适.还有scenery应该换成scene所以
这个句子改完应该是这样：" My wife can see everything what I do in the heaven" he said," I am 51 years old,47 years old of the wife who has died, we are both from the Connecticut state and we have teached in a high school.In 1996,I steped on the Chinese land with Ornan for the first time,she was drawn on by the earthy people and beautiful scene quickly.
The Children though has no money, the pencil does not good to use, they under the moonlight study, having a class in the house that leak air, very great.这句中.首先说,children 是名词复数,谓语动词用单数显然不合适has--had does --was study ——studied having --had that --with,这是with 的复合结构
问一下,very great连同上面的though在这里你想表达什么意思?
总体润滑一下这个句子：At that period the Children has no money, the pencil was not good to use, they studied under the moonlight and had a class in the house with the leak air.
After retiring, we at China, but, in 2002, Ornan is looked up the cancer in Shanghai, we return to the Connecticut state treatment.But, because the cancer cell spread, the Ornan took to love dearly to leave me with the regret, she spoken her wish —— For China poor and love passionately study of child and simple Chineses to do something.
这句中retiring--retired arrive --arrived return--returned过去的事应该用过去式 looked up --looked over treatment--for treatment
spread--had spreaded发生在检查出来癌症之前
he Ornan took to love dearly to leave me with the regret,这句不明白
child--children Chineses--Chinese Chinese本来就是复数,没必要+s
句子改完之后应该是：
After retirred, we arrived at China, but, in 2002, Ornan is looked over the cancer in Shanghai, we returned to the Connecticut state for treatment.But, because the cancer cell had spreaded, the Ornan took to love dearly to leave me with the regret, she left her wish —— For China poor and love passionately study of children and earthy Chinese to do something.
So from 2005 I began walks in China alone.Shenzhen, Guangzhou, Sichuan,…… Peking, Tienjin, Yunnan, I have walked 26 stand, each to a city, I will taken out 500 yuan enter the native Red Cross contribute money boxes.It is meaningful to do like this, my wife can see everything that I do in the sky."
这句中from--since walks－－to walk taken--take that --what
sky--heaven
润滑下这句：So since 2005 I have began to walk though China alone.Shenzhen, Guangzhou, Sichuan,…… Peking, Tienjin, Yunnan, I have walked 26 stand, each city, I will take out 500 yuan for the native Red Cross to contribute money boxes.It is meaningful to do so, my wife can see everything what I do in the heaven."
How the brave that person admire, he for the sake of love, for helping those poor child in foreign country, he do like this of pay!I can't have any language to express my respect ,I think I just need to give the faraway praying for him" wish you peaceful!"
the brave--brave 去掉he child--children in foreign --in the foreign
he do like this of pay!这句不明白
润滑下这句话：
How brave that person is , for the sake of love, for helping those poor children in the foreign country.I can't say anything to express my respect ,I think what I need is to give the faraway pray to him" wish you peaceful!"